Short Story Rough Draft

Sarah Arocha
Mrs.Belden
Honors English I
6 October 2014

Forever
It was  just a normal Monday in December. She was almost done with dinner; pancakes bacon and eggs. She knew it was his favorite thing to come home to after a long day at work. She set the table and looked at the time 5:45 he should be back any second now she thought. So she got out one of her favorite books and started to read. 20 minutes had passed before she looked at the time again. That was weird she thought he was almost always on time. She assumed it was just traffic so she waited a little longer, then she got the call. It was the hospital the women on the phone sounded very nervous as she said
"Excuse me is this Allison Jeremy Callahan's fiancé"
I answered quickly without hesitation
"Yes this is she, is there something wrong"
"Well" her voice waverd.
"I'm.. I'm afraid Mr. Callahan has been in a pretty bad accident you should want to come right away, I'm so sorry."
Ally dropped the phone fear consumed her body as she sprinted to the car. When she finally got to the hospital it was crazy, as she expected she was listening to the news on the way up to find out more. As it would turn out it was a pretty huge accident. A semi had lost control on the icy highway and flipped over. There were many people being rushed to the hospital from the accident like Jeremy. She checked in with one of the nurses and she led her down hallway after hallway trying to explain to her his condition but she couldn't focus all she could think about was the moment, the moment he had asked her to marry him. They had been dating for year now and it had been the greatest year of her life; they did everything together.
      Jeremy was nervous when he would pick her up she would be wearing her blue gown and cap he could just imagine her. They would both done with college and could go wherever they wanted. Jeremy knew this along with something else. He loved her, he knew he wanted to spend the rest of his life with her. In his eyes she was a ball of sunshine, radiant, and never dull. She always knew how to have fun and make him smile. She was also beautiful she had long light brown hair that came to her waist olive skin and bright green eyes. He thought he was the luckiest guy on the planet for a girl like that to even notice him. So lucky infact that he wanted that treasure to be all his. He would propose that night.
    She had a feeling he would propose soon, whenever they were together it was the best feeling in the world. When he picked her up from school that day he looked nervous. His hands were sweaty and he was biting his lip, she knew this was the day. She tried to make conversation he answered but with short answers as if to try and keep his cool. When they reached their destination she could still tell he was still nervous fumbling with the map swearing under his breath. She took him by the hands looked into his eyes and said
“Yes”
He looked at her confused and she laughed
“Yes, my answer is yes I will marry you”
He blew out a gust of air the smiled.
“Thank god" he said with a smile
They hugged and he pulled out the ring.
She would remember that moment forever and all she could think was he had to make it he had to be there for her wedding day and everything els after that; she needed him. The nurse said they were almost there, her heart was beating out of her chest as she tried to keep calm for him. They approched the door and with one swift motion it was open and she saw his face. His hair dark and thick his fair skin and blue eyes but his face was unrecongnizable. Covered by cuts and bruses it was a horrific sight. She felt her eyes start to burn with such intensity as she held back sobs.
“Hey Ally” he said through coughs
She couldn’t speak not if she wanted to hold it together. As he tried to roll to his side the doctor whispered in her ear
“He really doesn’t have a lot of time left dear, we did everything we could”
She covered her mouth quickly and wiped the tears that were starting to drop from her eyes. When Jeremey spoke again his voice was light as if he had found peace with the situation and he said
"Listen Ally I know the state I'm in is not good and that I won't be able to see how beautiful you look on our wedding day or be able to start a family with you and I'm so sorry for that, but I want you to know that you were by far the greatest thing to ever happen to me and the fact that I get to die knowing I was loved by you, well that is a fulfilled life. I love you Ally"
Now she couldn't stop it, the tears came fast and hard. She was smacked in the face by reality. She walked slowly towards him and put her arms around him she stayed like that until the beeps started getting slower and slower and then with tears streaming down her face and voice shaking she said
"And I will love you forever"